Talk:Hot Sugar (song)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:18, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Soon, Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:18, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 06:31, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

the song to be the lead single → the song to be the lead single (to make it clear)

I do not see the difference between the original and your suggestion. Aoba47 (talk) 00:15, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Please combine the first two paragraphs

I put the first sentence of the original second paragraph into the first one, but I do not believe combining both paragraphs would be a good as it would be far too large at that point. Aoba47 (talk) 00:15, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The lyrics revolve → Its lyrics revolve

Your suggestion would not make sense in this context. It only works if the "song" was the subject of the previous sentence, and that is not the case as both media outlets and commentators were the subject of the previous sentence. Aoba47 (talk) 00:15, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

was mixed: some critics praised → was mixed, with some critics praising

I do not believe that the "with" construction would be the most appropriate answer here as it would make the sentence far too long and disjointed. I did, however, replace the colon with a semi-colon. Aoba47 (talk) 00:15, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox[edit]

Remove the "Recorded" information as this is nowhere to be found in the article

Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 00:15, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Release and composition[edit]

It was released as a single from → was it the 2nd, 3rd... single?

I have added a note about this as the single order for the album is not entirely clear in the later releases. Aoba47 (talk) 00:38, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

During an interview with Essence, Braxton said → use "the singer" here to avoid repetition

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 00:21, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

She said that she → She also explained that she

Revised, though I do not think that the "also" part is needed. Aoba47 (talk) 00:21, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

33-seconds → no "-" here needed

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 00:21, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Beatport is not a reliable source for key and BPM, so please remove that information (sorry)

Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 00:21, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

respectively → ,respectively

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 00:21, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Reception[edit]

I don't know if YouKnowIGotSoul.com is reliable, but I'll let it stand there as it is

Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 00:16, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The paragraph is well-written ;)

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 00:16, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Music video[edit]

on August 28, 2013 → place this after "Instagram account"

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 00:19, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

specifically her visual → specifically to her visual

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 00:19, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Kevin Apaza of Direct Lyrics referenced the visual → Kevin Apaza of Direct Lyrics referenced to the visual

That would not be grammatically correct in this context. Aoba47 (talk) 00:19, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

had abandoned production → add a "the" before production

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 00:19, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

that she had hire → that she had hired

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 00:19, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances[edit]

surprised the singer onstage by jumping on stage → remove the first "onstage"

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 00:17, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel[edit]

flawless ;)

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 00:16, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Charts[edit]

Fixed issues by myself

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 00:16, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Other stuff[edit]

Copy-violation[edit]

16.0% is super!

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 00:16, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Media[edit]

Sample seems stable

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 00:16, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

References[edit]

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
No dead links! Good job!

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 00:16, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Outcome[edit]

On hold for 7 days! Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:48, 15 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your review! I will address your comments later today or tomorrow if that is okay. Feel free to let me know if you need any help with any current or future projects. Aoba47 (talk) 22:51, 15 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Thank you as always for the review. I believe that I have addressed everything to the best of my ability. Aoba47 (talk) 00:39, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Gladly passing! Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:38, 16 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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